tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-17021150.post112748735622115276..comments2019-09-09T21:06:03.073-04:00Comments on <p align="left">THE WRITER'S CORNER<br><br>...I write ... therefore I am...</p>: A Voice in the NightB. A.http://www.blogger.com/profile/10534085187812649408noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-17021150.post-34240608178485542192010-02-27T15:48:56.526-05:002010-02-27T15:48:56.526-05:00This was a nicely written story! It provides good ...This was a nicely written story! It provides good tips for camping especially in the winter. You provided excellent descriptions throughout. I could even picture being there too! You also had a nice flow of dialogue. Great Job!!!! :)<br /><br />Spirit DancerAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-17021150.post-61929559221660246232010-02-27T15:48:16.535-05:002010-02-27T15:48:16.535-05:00This was a very enjoyable story. The dad is sooooo...This was a very enjoyable story. The dad is sooooooo typical of a dad, lol! That's the sort of thing I can imagine mine doing.<br /><br />Gray SquirrelAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-17021150.post-60191095862738035012010-02-27T15:24:19.394-05:002010-02-27T15:24:19.394-05:00Hmmm, I'm not a great fan of camping, but I ca...Hmmm, I'm not a great fan of camping, but I can see your writing talent.<br /><br />-It would be helpful, though, if you broke up the action between your mom and dad so that we are aware it's different from the action at the camping area. You could italicize it or put astrisks before and after, something like that to tell us this is a different scene.<br /><br />-There needs to be a concrete conclusion at the end of this story if you intended this to be the end. What did the boys learn from the experience, what did the dad learn, some reason for us to have taken this journey with you. What was your reason for sharing the story?<br /><br />You have talent, keep writing!<br /><br />SusanLAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-17021150.post-17933276318460159262010-02-27T15:23:10.330-05:002010-02-27T15:23:10.330-05:00There are occasional times when I am reading artic...There are occasional times when I am reading articles in someones portfolio that a particular writing seems to spark a "Special" interest.<br /><br />This is such an item. Very nicely written.<br /><br />Easy and enjoyable reading. Thank you for writing and sharing it.<br /><br />God Bless,<br /><br />BobbyAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-17021150.post-2593141055707089872010-02-27T14:43:52.085-05:002010-02-27T14:43:52.085-05:00Your story really held my interest. I thought it w...Your story really held my interest. I thought it was very good. I did notice a couple of typos that you might want to fix. "Stuck my head out of the sleeping bag to listenED" and "...woods at night calling ME name. <br /><br />Other than that I thought the writing was great!<br /><br />Story BugAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com